Who and why I wondered when I met you
You were like my Birthday gift carefully untied
like how I shook and tried to look inside
thats how I began getting to know you
slowly untying the ribbons and then
ripping out the fine covers well so that
it won't be ugly; that's how I did it
taking the first step, first love in freshmen
sometimes disappointing, if you don't reach
my expectations; other times scary,
how I see that I may get addicted each
morning, day and evening: just so lovely
I wish that you and I will stay the same:
taking each step with care and love. I hope...
(Sonnet)
Cool, so you didn't use the Shakespearean sonnet form. Is it an Italian sonnet? (it must have been hard cause it seems real confusing in the ppt in class) I really like your choice of topic. Makes me feel more connections to it because I'm a freshman myself :D (even though I've never had a relationship with anyone) I also liked your second stanza. Reminds me of unwrapping birthday gifts. I usually just tear them out because I'm impatient XD The second line in the first stanza, 3rd line in the second stanza are over 10 syllables. Is the last stanza supposed to be a rhyming couplet, or is it left like that?
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