My heart is acting weird these days because
it sprints then jumps and then rolls all around
Normal day, normal night, just same like that
but my heart alone is ready for more
I believe it is after meeting you
that my life turned around and upside down
to see more, to seek more, and to feel more
to consider all things precious like gold
I believe it is because you were good
good to me, just so great to do these things:
treat me so special, like I am the best
although I am not perfect nor flawless
investigate all your free time into
spending with me though I may never be
what you are to me, an endless giver
(Blank Verse)
Nice poem! It really reminded me of this book called "The Giver". I'm pretty sure you've heard of it before. Seems like whoever "you" in the poem is, he/she is a great person. I really liked how you expressed emotions through actions (sprints, jumps, rolls, turn upside down). I think the first line in the poem has 9 syllables. Oh, and when writing in iambic pentameter, try to match the beat (da dum da dum....). I know it's pretty hard to do though (Ribby's really good at it).
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